Friday, March 13, 2009

To this day I cannot forget
The tears were making my cheeks wet.

I couldn’t stop crying,
My little brother was dying.

I didn’t know what to do.
What would you do if it was you?

I felt like I was going to die,
Sometimes I still think of him and cry.


Oscar

11 comments:

Anonymous said...

DUDE.. this poem was great! I like how you showed sad emotion in it. you expressed how you really feel and i think thats really cool.

Nick P (1)

Anonymous said...

sounds like a very touchy subject. this is a good subject and i can relate to it...

Kelsee

Anonymous said...

OH MY GOSH OSCAR! wow that's so so so sad! If this isn't just a poem you made up I am so sorry. Great poem though!

-Kesha :)

Anonymous said...

You need to step it up if you don't get locked up man. I hope you don't you are a good kid and can do a lot in life.

Mark

Anonymous said...

Emotion gives poems so much more meaning. I guess suffering is necessary for good art. Keep writing.

Nick B.

Anonymous said...

I'm sorry about what you wrote. I have lost some one who was dear to me. I know that it's not easy to just lift your head back up and wipe your tears. Because they just keep falling.

-shalee l.

Anonymous said...

bad butt ese i liked it i knew there was a soft spot in you jaja thats great though

Anonymous said...

This poem was insane. I really like the emotion in it.
Dani

Anonymous said...

That Is a really good poem. I think that its good because i had a friend die and I cried a lot.

Tayler

Scott said...

thats a good poem i did'nt think gangsters cryed

Anonymous said...

Simple poems can be the most meaningful. Find real feelings and keep writing about them.

Nick B.