‘’Get on the ground!’’ yelled the officers. I know this was going to be bad. 2006 was the exact year that all of this happened. It was Wednesday, February 12. I was driving my two little brothers and my sister to my friend’s house, where we were staying for a couple days, because I had no clue where my parents were. So I asked my best friends mom to let my sibling stay a couple days.
Kirk
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9 comments:
Dude that sucks. I think you could have added a little more into this paraghraph, but it is good.
Dani
Oh wow. Tell the rest of the story! Haha that is so sad! You didnt know where they were!? Gosh parents are rediculous! Mine are too so I can picture this well.
-Kesha ;)
not a bad way to start out your intro. but i think that you could use a little more detail then that.
Tayler
I love your first line, it captures attention and begs to be read. Keep writing.
Nick B.
Wow man you already have me hooked. This is a way good begging.
alex
I can totally relate to that situation. It is scary at the time and really unexpected. They make for great stories though.
Karissa
Wow that sounds like a good story i'm sorry that you have to go through it again.
TY
Man that sucks. Well things always happen for a reason. But I hope it turned out good.
Madeleine
Thats amazing. You could add a little more. but it was awesome. Couldn't wait to read the rest of the story.
Kelsee 4th
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